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Old 09-13-04   #1
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since i love to bitch SO much

cuz i do, bitch about other's poetry.....i always get peeps askin' me to show mine, so here it goes

High School Marching Band Trip (1997)

Sandy roads next to bleak beeches
We marched down,
Twirling and turning
In an instrumental militia
For Florida's phallus-land parade...
We had pride,
Flag painted faces,
Music sheets of acid,
And memorization...
How will we relax?

You marched silently with me,
But screamed in a ring of girls,
Giggling like an optimist and gossiping like a bitch,
Crying in between...
Some stories are comical...sad, but comical.
Like, remember-the-time
You gave me a blow-job and sneezed,
And everyone called you Sneezer-Cock-Teaser?
Or, remember-the-time
We were fucking and I farted?
Or, what-about-the-time
You had your abortion;
Scraped out that fatherless mess?
How will we relax?

You will not bask in the blackened sun
Nor swim in the ocean
When rain drops of gossip overflow onto you...
Today's tales were more drama to dramatize
With austere affections...
Some flutist freshman believes my seed is fertilizing,
Clarinetist Clar confirms she has crabs,
And the flagget dancing Danny desires to sneeze on me.
How will we relax?

Well baby,
Give me the acid and let's begin this war,
Play your worst note...
There are eighteen dicks and ninety-nine orifices,
The black sun, sandy roads, and bleak beeches.
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here's another

Decisions

Casual calamities outline your delicate curves
With obscenities of motherhood--abscene of attractiveness
Killing pride--privation of creativity as he fades away
With some other girl he kissed, typical harmony
Of hormonal curiosity, lustful dreams,
And your eyes rain for the dead heart under your gentle bosom.

Tranquil tragedies in a locket of hope scream in its lost tomb
With cracked illusions on your fading portrait--fruitful disease, the dead vine
For the ripe--his sperm spells R-I-P in the choreography of ecstacy
Spitting poison into your seed and luscious blood stream
Under a surname of death spelled with four simple letters.

Fateful fatalities foretold by white trash darlings
In redneck surburbia--untold pain spoke in cries
For Eve's freewill--he truly loves you...
Typical expression of your denying ignorance
And emotional arrogance from your bruised heart
Blinded by the crimson tides flowing in your watery eyes.

Then there is me...
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very nice. i'm not sure i enjoy the jovial diction around the middle of the poem, but it was all very well put together. im glad i finally got to read your work.

i wrote this and saw you posted another while i was replying, the above refers to the first poem

the second is truely a work of art. normally such a wordy poem wont hold my interest, but this is awesome.
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?

like to think i'm not addicted
with a cigarette in one hand
and another shot of vodka in the other,
mixing with the illusions of opium's dream,
a dancing ballerina before my eyes
dressed in your silhouette.
the stage is set,
built by tolls of indulgence,
the curtains will rise
when i close my eyes
and the tragedy will begin
within a song of love,
poetry of the body
in each climatic beat.

i wish to escape
from the epiphenomenal shades
of memories
as you spit on my tomb
in the overabundant cemetery of love.
silenced catastrophe was in your heart
when you first kissed me,
and it was then that i died,
fulfilling my philosophy on life:
LIVE, FUCK, DIE...
so why,
even after you've sucked me, fucked me,
loved me then killed me,
I still dream of you.
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this style is a play on words style....i suggest you read it once, slowly and to yourself....then, read it again, very fast and outloud.....you should be able to get it

Alcohollick [sic] Heart

sex you all pat earns pro create in two no thing
win use you all ass pecks OF LUST care actor rise
thresh holds four relation ships.
eye dew knot berry in two pat earns OF ABSTINENCE two a void pane,
butt eye all so dew knot care actor rise in tense sex you all PLEASURE
ass annie base hiss four relation ships.
eye bee leave every thing miss took four generous city
all ways in furs a way two under stand
sad inning hour hearts wood miss take ass dyeing companion ship,
win truth fully no thing IS DEAD
bee cousin relation ships weee billed four sex you all pat earns
ass base hiss four companion ships cane knot serve i've.
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Writers Block

I have not had a drink for four hours
And I need a goddamn cigarette!
A couple of pills choked me earlier
When sobering was a slobber of blahs',
But now the little powder puff swirls
Dissolve in the liquid dreams
Of imagination's inspiration,
And I thank Jesus for his death
Because I am bored.

I must confess:
No chemicals make reactions slower,
And these words walk down an empty highway
In search of alchemy for lead feet.

Time watches time over washing tides of crimson wrist rivers
And each slice is a rush of life
For you to lick like a vampyre to remain beautifully decayed
And aged to perfection in innocence.
Fulfill your disease by fattening lust with love and other sexual cliches
Because life is a shallow lake for the grand skies
Sprinkled with stars and painted with rainbows for beauty lost in captivity.

Oblivion is obese
As my body starves for torture...
...Fuck you and your negligent abuse,
Scream at me and make me cry,
All I hear is my own silent sobs.
For God's sake do something!
Maybe you are too wrapped up to notice
You dispondent and distant fuck!

...New poets are always the worst,
Dead poets are always the best,
And old poets are always poets.

The conclusion is conversed among the verses
And everything is criticized,
But now I have cigarettes and must quit
To save myself the pain of thought.
This poem had been purity at its _________
And has meant nothing.
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superb, and many big words of which I did not know the meaning...curse you!

but truly awesome, I liked them well enough
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thank you both.....but admit is....I SUCK!!!!! w00t w00t!
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this one's a bit more violent....

For Me Please

Drip deep inside its wound
Penetrating impregnating slits,
Splash in the gash the seed of love
Like acid orgasmic flicks,
Squirming sperm sing ecstacy
Through reinforced entry,
I cum to fuck the open wound
Spreading disease deep within her,
So wipe those raining tears
And clear your bloody eyes,
Smile like you like it (for me please)
And love me like I love you.
Please, please love me.
I said love me!
Shut up and fuck me!
Quit crying or start dying,
It is up to you Bitch!
I do not need your shit Bitch!
Just accept my dick!
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here's another

Death of Innocence

Summer feels like death
In the back seat of a Friday night
On a back road of hell
Sharing my cigarette with her;
The rain begins licking my windshield,
Bouncing sounds of dull metal,
And she turns on the radio
To avoid Mother's crying;
With casual calamities
From wannabe-diva-teen whores
Singing,
Yet another,
Requiem for love.

She buries our disease
In its tomb of ash
And pulls me close,
Whispering in wet,
"I am going to fuck you..."
Our lips speak love
As our tongues dance in our mouths,
And she strips me
Free from clothed security,
Leaving me vulnerable and her acceptable
As she covers me with her body,
Warmth for an innocent infant,
And she slides me inside
Expecting typical resolutions.

I trip and tremble
Like a nervous refugee,
Though she smiles reassurance,
Shedding decency
On my performance,
And I hear Mother screaming,
Dying in the distance,
My innocence fading away
Condensed in pearls of sweat beads
Making love to the flames of sinful weather
Kissing our sensual
And sensitive lower body.

And with one last flash of electric weeping
From Mother's angry voice,
The age of immaturity
Sleeps soundly in its grave,
Stirring thoughts of heaven
With typical lustful dreams at ease;
And so,
She leaves me in the backseat
And takes another cigarette into her mouth,
Seductively sucking the tip,
And she begins to dance
As yet another,
Wannabe-diva-teen whore
Sings a requiem for love.
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cuz i do, bitch about other's poetry.....i always get peeps askin' me to show mine, so here it goes

High School Marching Band Trip (1997)

Sandy roads next to bleak beeches
We marched down,
Twirling and turning
In an instrumental militia
For Florida's phallus-land parade...
We had pride,
Flag painted faces,
Music sheets of acid,
And memorization...
How will we relax?

You marched silently with me,
But screamed in a ring of girls,
Giggling like an optimist and gossiping like a bitch,
Crying in between...
Some stories are comical...sad, but comical.
Like, remember-the-time
You gave me a blow-job and sneezed,
And everyone called you Sneezer-Cock-Teaser?
Or, remember-the-time
We were fucking and I farted?
Or, what-about-the-time
You had your abortion;
Scraped out that fatherless mess?
How will we relax?

You will not bask in the blackened sun
Nor swim in the ocean
When rain drops of gossip overflow onto you...
Today's tales were more drama to dramatize
With austere affections...
Some flutist freshman believes my seed is fertilizing,
Clarinetist Clar confirms she has crabs,
And the flagget dancing Danny desires to sneeze on me.
How will we relax?

Well baby,
Give me the acid and let's begin this war,
Play your worst note...
There are eighteen dicks and ninety-nine orifices,
The black sun, sandy roads, and bleak beeches.

I liked this a lot... I would say to try and cut down on the elipses (they're distracting). But so much more beyond that, I dig this piece.
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Writers Block

I have not had a drink for four hours
And I need a goddamn cigarette!
A couple of pills choked me earlier
When sobering was a slobber of blahs',
But now the little powder puff swirls
Dissolve in the liquid dreams
Of imagination's inspiration,
And I thank Jesus for his death
Because I am bored.

I must confess:
No chemicals make reactions slower,
And these words walk down an empty highway
In search of alchemy for lead feet.

Time watches time over washing tides of crimson wrist rivers
And each slice is a rush of life
For you to lick like a vampyre to remain beautifully decayed
And aged to perfection in innocence.
Fulfill your disease by fattening lust with love and other sexual cliches
Because life is a shallow lake for the grand skies
Sprinkled with stars and painted with rainbows for beauty lost in captivity.

Oblivion is obese
As my body starves for torture...
...Fuck you and your negligent abuse,
Scream at me and make me cry,
All I hear is my own silent sobs.
For God's sake do something!
Maybe you are too wrapped up to notice
You dispondent and distant fuck!

...New poets are always the worst,
Dead poets are always the best,
And old poets are always poets.

The conclusion is conversed among the verses
And everything is criticized,
But now I have cigarettes and must quit
To save myself the pain of thought.
This poem had been purity at its _________
And has meant nothing.
Very, very nice.
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hmm wow you finally bit the bullet and shared your poems with the world. and over all suck great poems they are. funny how much you swear in them though, I thought you said swearing took away from some of the writing/ or do I have you confused with someone else? grrrrrrr I don't know, to early in the morning.
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You're freaking gross. Your poems beat the shit out of the rest of DF's melange of poetic diarrhea, though. Nice work.
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grassy-ass...all of ya

and lily, no, twas not me who spoke ill of cursing in poetry....i curse a lot in my poetry

i only wish i could write more puzzle type poems, but the structure gets all fuckered when i try to post it

but i couple i can post....
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Asking For Directions

Nay,
tiv’ a tea
that bee brewed in tHE’Se hILLs
bias simple people.
2737 b.(efore) c.(hrist)
tHE legENDS say,

sum China
EmpEROR [sic] watched the golden
leaves of tea
float wit’ the air
into awe pot
of boiling water;
opened tHE cAGED lips of innocence it did.
Heaven’s kiss that first sip.

Shame today
first sips won’t be as Mister E. China man!
Can’t brew tHE same kISs...
But we cAN b(r)uddha spit
of heaven’s stINKy mouth...

We unCOVERED Mister. E.’s
hid den wit’in PAGEs
of Sian test, philosophers,
an(d) other minds
writing world’s words.
FADING the bland essence
of sweet-bitter tea,
we stole null ledge of God’s creation
and purr ‘fected
our insatiable tongue
for PLEASEure–good vs’ evil that is!

Good wit’ re-GUARD
to desires of man–cars, t.v.’s,
an(d) other city-life fancies.
Evil wit’ the fact
mother-(nature) is spoiled
wit’ mans dirty fancies.

Listen to me,
I’m off in a WORLD of my own.
To answer your question...
Nay,
tiv’ a tea
we brew in tHE’Se hILLs...
Barley is out towards the city,
near drunk in men
in dirty bars.
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Lessons of (Mother) Nature

winter...
(a double-you
before the seize on spring
bring men that hide
under the snow blanket
like a bear
naked of the flower's blossom
and lies for fresh tool lip seduction)
...will bring you distress.

inter...
(a double-you
after the leaves fall
owe four million of frozen flakes floating
within cracked lakes
drowning any sea
men swimming
who forget to cum on the shore)
...will bring you distress.

win...
(a double-you
three sum four play
by the men you in-
counter-balance pretty lies
on their tongues
to rain on some, er,
all miss conceptions)
...will bring you...rest.
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ooo puzzles! you know how i luv those. funny how you refered to a vagina as an open wound. people ask me how i can find it unattractive and my normal response is that it resembles an open wound, or axe wound, but then im a flaming homo.
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hahahahahahahahahahaha.....glad to be of some reassurance
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i only wish i could write more puzzle type poems, but the structure gets all fuckered when i try to post it
you have to put it in code tags (the little pound button on the reply screen... then you can make all the funny linebreaks and spacing ya want.

Comes out like this:

Code:
My soul 
     is      an
   empty                   pit
of              self                     destruction.
easy as cake.
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