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Originally posted by DeLiRiOuS ok this one isn't finished, and i d like some advice on how to finish it.pweeze, and spank you
~shattered dreams~
sitting in a closet
are the shatterd dreams
of her once proud parents
the hopes that their
"little girl" would one day
be"just like them"
torn before their eyes
but all they can do
is sit and watch thier
"dream"
slowly wither away
with every tear
their"little girl"
isn't little any more
she is big now
and so is the tare in her heart
they do not understand her
or the problems that she has
nor do they give a damn to try
they just sit back
watching their shattered dream die
as she cries
she wonders what they see
she wonders what she did wrong
and why, if there is something, can't she see it
she wonders how long this will last
until they will come to see
that she is who she is
and there is no one else she'd rather be
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I'm waaaay late for this one... but I need the writing practice...since I've gone rusty from my long absence...here goes the suggestion to insert
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no one else she’d rather be
the daring flight to an eagle’s nest
isn’t what she really does best
the soaring wings of a phoenix takes flight
for her every plight
drops away to grains of salt
rubbing wounds to burn
untamed, yet willing
her soul gently quiets
for one day soon they will look upon her face
and know of her tastes
..as I said... i'm rusty.. sounds kind of mixed up and blah.. but *shrugs* it was practice... you can use it if you want to.
Thanks for the practice run Delirious.