Hey, so i posted one of my first poems in a long time and fuckdoll invited me to come check this place out, im not really all that sure what you guys are all about but i was wondering if anyone has constructive critisism about my poem.

In a world of gray,

Beauty is thought to be as rare as a drop of rain landing on your tounge while indoors.

But while most thinkers of that sort are concentrating on each drop of rain, carefully monitoring its lifespan before it comes crashing down on the ground, the knowledged appreciate the symphony of rain as a whole. The booming percussion of the thunder, the perfect harmony of a thousand droplets of rain cascading down and melting into the earth. They stare awe-struck as flashes of lightning create an array of special effects so grand that God himself shines through the clouds, glowing with pride and admiration.

In a world of gray,

Beauty is as out of place as a blossoming flower lighting the streets of a forgotten city, or a desert landscape so beautiful that the wall of enlightenment around it begins to crumble.

In a world of gray,

Beauty is everywhere.

Hey, welcome to the Darkforum and welcome to the smokeroom!

I like your poem, it has a certain degree of uniqueness that I find attractive in poetry!

I cant offer much critisism about it other than for you to maybe structure the middle part of your poem, the big block of words, differently, so it resembles more of a poem than a short story!

I hope you post more stuff, and enjoy darkforum.............Christ.....I sound like a spokesman for the damn place!

Byesy Bye!

lol... well hi there and welcome. There is a thread called the editing room here somewhere that you can post your poem in if you're not too sure about it. Some good people, and i'm sure they'll be helpful. There is also a thread called 'the lounge where you can come chit chat with anyone who happens to be around at the same time as you, etc. Above all, welcome.