I cry every time I read it

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I sit in my room crying in the shadows
my wrists speak a dark shade of crimson
The pain and my captive mind are distant now
and the freedom has found me
and I have found you

I am no stranger to this act they call mutilation
they think it is wrong, it is not right
nothing feels less wrong or more right
you are the only thing in my life
and i do this for you and only you

As a figure approaches me now,
you fade and I fade too.
the sirens sound as I drift out
I am leaving this world
there is no doubt.

The poetry forum is not a friendly place, they judge.

I cry every time I read this poem

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I sit in my room crying in the shadows
my wrists speak a dark shade of crimson
The pain and my captive mind are distant now
freedom has found me
and I have found you

I am no stranger to this act they call mutilation
they think it is wrong, it is not right
nothing feels less wrong or more right
you are the only thing in my life
and i do this for you and only you

As a figure approaches me now,
you fade and I fade too.
the sirens sound as I drift out
I am leaving this world
there is no doubt.

my wrists cry out in captivity
they are trapped in your asshole hlep lol hlep

Well, since it was by your 'late' friend I won't critique it. You should put his/her name on it... sort of like in tribute. Either way welcome to darkforum.

yet you think that posting this in the bitchboard would be any better? people are still gonna chop you down with your poem anyway... unless if you did it on purpose just to get everyone to do that... since that can strike people to get pissy very easily... then i think that is seriously cool *nods head*
but i'm not sappossed to be nice in the bitchboard to begin with... since that is mainly the whole intire point of the bitchboard.......

anyway i see no fucking talent in that poem once so ever... so that one of the suckiest things i have ever read in my intire life... i can't believe i just wasted my time reading that fucking garbage....
you fucking suck!!!!!!!!!!

ONCE SO EVER

holy shit you are the dumbest cunt in the history of ever

Why is your friend late, did he miss the bus or something?
What kind of homosexual doesn't know how to ride a bus
dj riot

regardless of the poem, i think the current avatar says it all. and yes, this is me judging a book by it's cover. and yes, all brown people are terrorists.

I wasn't mean there, but I can be here. It's absolute shit. The title should be, 'cliche'.

' I sit in my room crying in the shadows'
---boofuckin'hoo so what? Oh yeah, I forgot... every emo 13 year old has the worst life EVER.

'my wrists speak a dark shade of crimson'
---bwahahahahaaa... yeah okay Cause the word crimson is dark, and spooky... and you even told us so.... ooooh.....

'The pain and my captive mind are distant now'
---Somehow I think your mind has always been distant.

'freedom has found me
and I have found you'
---wow... I didn't know you were looking. Was I lost or something? What's the fucking point?

'I am no stranger to this act they call mutilation'
---here it is! *CUTCUTCUT*

'they think it is wrong, it is not right'
---good job there. You said the same thing, twice.

'nothing feels less wrong or more right'
---This is actually getting absurd. Who the fuck cares? Oh wait yeah, you're the only one with issues. You should have put the words 'crimson blood' in this line... would have made it emo-er.

'you are the only thing in my life
and i do this for you and only you'
---what... are we back to the mutilation and dark shades of crimson? Garbage.

' As a figure approaches me now,
you fade and I fade too.
the sirens sound as I drift out
I am leaving this world
there is no doubt.'
---I can't keep going line by line. It hurts my senses too much. And there was way too much lameness in this last stanza. Sirens??? Whatever, bye.


So, in closing, let me sum things up, this poem is teh suck.

So is this late friend dead or what?

Quiet....ever think of taking advice from your user name?

Jeez dude.

Man this sucks... Theres nothing more lamer than a suicide note with lameass poerty on it....

Why not "FUCK YOU LOSERS! I'M DEAD! SEE YOU IN HELL!!!"

Or "Yeah, no autopsy please, I will save you a job by slashing my wrists."

Or "Well, I was gonna file for bankrupsy but i thought this would be easier."

Or "I was gonna do a lameass poem but it sounded shitty."

Or "I only did it to get high, nobody told me taking too many pills can kill you."

Or "Whoops"

Or "I wanna leave on a happy note so heres a joke: Why did the chicken cross the road?"

Or "I didn't want to wait till I died of STD's so I just saved the medical profession money."

Or "I'm gonna haunt you... Asshole."

Man theres many options you can go for... Lame poetry just isn't one of 'em.

w3rd.

No. I rather enjoy my Internet persona on this particular website. If you want to take it as real, that's your perogative.

I'm so cool. I was "mean" (although, I prefer the term "real") in the actual poetry section. wusses.

are you retarded
it was a joke

It was far from funny.

one time I molested a dog
not funny
had to be done
do you see now

I stand intrigued, be as you wish, 'tis your call.