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magnus1121

Control Freak

You can't
control my life
You can't
take my rights
You want
me to love
You want
me to live

Your hate
it thrives in me
Your love
it burns in me
Your life
is lost in me
Your love
can't ever be

And you, I loved you
Even though, you hated me
And you, I'll kill you
Because you, you betrayed me

I hate you
I break you
Fuck you
Can't save you

I love you
I need you
Fuck you
Can't save you

And you, I loved you
Even though, you hated me
And you, I'll kill you
Because you, you betrayed me

Deconformist · 09-14-01

awesome rhythm. I liked it a lot.

keep pulling that shit out of your ass.

magnus1121 · **My ass is more poetic than I am. -** 09-14-01

Empty

I'm alone
again and again
I just think
when will this ever end?

You were lost
You were blind
You paid the cost
Then you lied

And I see through your life
And I see through your truth
And I know you're not real
And there's nothing inside

You keep it all down
Bottled inside
You know that it's wrong
You know you can't hide

You're unreal
I'm alone again
You're surreal
This won't ever end

Your life is a waste
Your truth is a lie
You left me alone
And I'm dying inside

And I see through your life
And I see through your truth
And I know you're not real
And there's nothing inside

Deconformist · 09-16-01

woohoo, go magnus. way to un-rhyme.

kidding, it's good. like I said, both are a little simplistic, but as you said, it was intentional. emotions like that are often simplistic in basis anyway, so...

keep on a-writin'....

magnus1121 · 09-16-01

Is un-rhyme even a fucking word?

GoddessOfDeath · 09-16-01

I really liked Empty..I could relate..Great job huney..

Deconformist · 09-18-01

Quote:

Originally posted by magnus1121
Is un-rhyme even a fucking word?

your mother!

magnus1121 · 09-18-01

If you have some sort of relationship with my mother, that's between you and her.

Deconformist · 09-18-01

we like being open about it.

questions? anyone? anyone?

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