well that was special. Seek help both writing and professional.

Jeez Louise, kids are scary. Happy that some people get that...

oh I get it. It also makes me being a writer when it seems the only reason it was written was to sound dark and profound it just came off future serial killery. that's not poetry. sorry if that's harsh but... wait no i'm not

who told ya that this was written as poetry?

do u actually seek for "special things"? you are looking in the wrong direction then and living in the wrong world.

The only thing that u read here was just images of my head written down, not any kind of showing off like the one u got in mind. got it , man?

Fan of splatterpunk?

Fuck, im not sure if i get right wht u said but...

if i did then hell yeah.

man, having images like that in your head does kinda make you Future Psycho 2007...but sixxx, you might be looking at the whole thing to closely...I mean, how's that profound? (No offense Canibal) Twisted, yes, sick, yes, dark, sure, in a disgusting way...But there's a deep lack of profoundness...
And, Canibal? You should think about being a liiittle bit less aggressive when facing criticism...kinda enforces the psycho image.

well... i do have those kinds of images in my head.. or in my dreams like a permanent thing but.. i dont actually do what those images show me right? i mean.. i havent cut any animal into pieces or cut off the head of anyone just cause i saw someone do it in my head...
Well.. i wasnt sure what splatterpunk meant although i am a fan of splatter in general.. but yeah now i know what u mean and the answer is still, hell yeah.. lol.
Honor, i dont think that sixx implied that what i wrote was.. splatterpunk if thats in what u dont agree! But even if he did.. he might have some reasons for it cause.. well the story its not the actual thing of splatter but ya know.. its close lol. Although i wasnt thinking of that when i was writting that down lol.
As for criticism.. ive got no problem with critism or else i wouldnt be posting my stories or anything in a forum. But ive got one thing.. myfallenikarus isnt actually making a critism as for the story. He is just bitching.

True...he did sound kind of offensive...but I guess after having read like a thousand people's pretencious psycho babble people tend to not care that being harsh to everyone might not be that cool...

As to the vivid imagery in your head...great that you can cope with it...I for one have the problem that I see myself dying somtimes...in really strange ways at that...kind of a trauma from an accident I had...but I seldomly see any bloody or cruel acts flash before my eyes...If I'd like to I guess I could. The creative might doth not fear the harshness of anguish...

Splatterpunk is kind of a weird thing...it does nothing for me. Movies, stories, whatever...maybe coz in movies, all the violence tends to be directed at women. I like horror movies, but there has to be some thrill appart from the chill you from seing a heart being cut out or something. And there are enough things that disgust me in everyday life...I don't have to look for that sort of sensation in fiction. Clive barker and me...not really friends.
But to your story: as I said, kids are scary, I mean, I never really liked kids, but after "the Omen", I had every comfirmation that they're the spawn of Satan...

PS: I didn't mean that what you wrote was pretencious psycho babble...there's just a lot of it in general that people like to post on lovely forums as this one

I' m the one that gave you a high rating, I thought it was delicious.

i guess yeah.. but thats how you become a total bitch towards other people without even having a reason for doing it.. i mean oright if u think i suck but at least give me a reason for it before u start bitching!

You see your self dying huh? I guess... that makes you somehow more prepared for when you time comes? nah.. i sure you dont feel that way but well i guess you should take advantage of that you know.. The thing that i can somehow cope with my nightmares or the images that ive got in my head.. it really cant make them stop. Sometimes i even wait for them to come so that i can write them down or draw them. Thats probably the only thing i can do about it you know.
Well.. as i said before i do like splatter as for splatterpunk i checked that it had to do with Clive Barker and Steven King.. uinfortunately i know only steven king.. as for clive damn i do remember that name but i cant remember from where i do know that name lol.
any known book of his?
anyway.. kids in my mind yeah damn scary and fucked up b ut in general these are only rumours ;P besdies its more easy to scare the audience with an "innocent" sweet child who muders people and cuts them into pieces than with an adult who does that lol. dont u think? kids are supposed to be nice or at lesat innocent not the root of evil ;P thats what scares u.and yeah i remember omen.. as well as that sweet little kid damien ;P

hey thnk u! and i was actually wondering lol

Honor: reply for ops ;P well.. dont worry about i get what ya mean..

Clive Barker wrote Hellraiser and the Book of Blood. He's into sm and stuff...I prefer any good old vampire story to all that gruesome sadistic slaughtering.

Must be horrible having nightmares like that...when I see myself dying I'm usually awake. i just freeze up and when it's over I'm slightly disoriented...I should probably see a shrink, but I don't like doctors. But I've read that drawing or writing your dreams down is good, cause you can deal with it. My nightmares always about trains and getting lost...

what you said about children's innocence is true...people don't suspect children to be evil. But I'm telling you, where I live there are kids everywhere, and some of them are downright bad. I have a kid sister and some of those boys she knows from preschool should just be locked up somewhere...

And I really don't think you suck at all...Your story has kind of a flow to it. I think in lyrical terms it's called anaphora what you did at the beginning with the repetitions. It puts emphasis on some words or sentences...I mean, if Goethe used tools like that to write good pieces, I don't see how anybody can fail as a writer by using them as well...

Tell me, Can, what do you wanna be when you grow up? Or even better: what are you?

Damn! Thats where i know Clive Barker from lol. never had the guts to watch Hellraiser though.. although the only horror movie character that scares me is Freddy(tahts why i love hi m lol ) and the only horror movie that i adore and scares the shit out of me(mostly cause of the whole concept) is In the mouth of madness. If uve ever heard of it..

No dont see a shrink trust me.. i once tried that, but i dont think it worked.. i mean i stopped cause i had no more money to pay but in any case she didnt do much for me. She just made me realise how miserable and unhappy i was since i was a kid. I mean.. u dont want a shrink to tell u right at your face how he pities u or how fucked up u are right?
Thats just... gonna make things worse. The thing is that if u write them.. your nightmares for example then when u read them its like they come back again. They wont haunt you or anything lol but you know you might remember them and freak out. So, that solution is a bit risky.. Now if u write them as little stories or draw them.. then yeah you could deal with them but of course they wont go away. You just learn to live with them. Why dont u try it?
I wish i could upload some of my sketches or photos here but the thing doesnt seem to work. It always shows me a message like, the file cannot open, writing directory and shit like that.. cant really tell whats wrong, so any help is welcome lol.

As what u said about your little sis.. well yeah there are loads of little evil kidos walking around.. lol thats always the case. Besides how do u think that all those fucked up psychos that are wandering around were as kids? All have a start!

I didnt get the comment about Goethe though... do u think he is a good writer or not? lol
sorry i dont get things easily... but thnk u for your comment.. the problem is that at times i cant write all my nightmares or images down just cause they are so... confused and shit.. u know? cant put them in an order... as drawings yeah.. perhaps.

I cant really tell u what i am. I mean.. that is up to your own decision. You can decide for that right?
I wanna become a photographer. I can deal with photography.. writing.. poetry... drawing.. painting.. a kind of sculpting... even singing at some point. I guess when u suck at everything else, there is always art to deal with. Have you ever thought why every talented artist is so fucked up? Theres always a reason for it.
Dont even think of couse that im calling myself talented. Fucked up at a point yeah lol. But at least I deal with it
what about u?

God, I loved Nightmare on Elm Street...fist time I watched it I was home alone...all the lights were out...it scared the crap out of me! But I don't think I'll ever watch Hellraiser...I know to many people who had to hurl after seeing it.

No, shrink then. I guess I don't need to pay someone to tell me that I'm fucked up...lol. I had I cute therapist after my accident though...

Well, Goethe is wonderful. I mean, that guy was really eloquent and everything he wrote had kind of an energy to it. But sometimes I just don't get what he's trying to say...

I had my share of crazy and vivid dreamy, and I drew them. Sometimes I look at the drawings and everything comes back. Sometimes it feels good, especially when it was actually a nice dream...I think that sometimes it's worse to wake up from a perfect dream than to have a nightmare...well, kinda depends on the nightmare I guess.

I am...a writer. Maybe a future director or actress or painter. I don't know. i love music, I love acting (well, actually I just kinda love to be on stage. makes me feel all warm and fuzzy inside...lol), I love movies. But I adore writing and reading. I love to create new worlds and characters, to breath life into a new person. But I don't want to call myself an artist. There's just too much negative baggage that goes witch that title. I'm not a suicidal drug adict who thinks that noe-one understands me...and I no pierced and tattooed black haired chick with no clue at all what's going on in the real world...and sometimes it's just those kind of persons one thinks of when hearing "artist". No, I'm fucked up, but I don't fit in any goddamn category.

I'm me. Ha-ha-fucking-ha.

I just read a book about Kurt Cobain. Man, that was a poor soul. I guess he is the perfect example for the average talented artist who's too fucked up to go on being himself.

Well, bout those sketches and photos...I'm so no computer geek, so I can't offer you any help. But you could try to send them by email. I mean, only if ya wanna share...

Well, new friend, I need to go and study for my last physics exam EVER. ( I'm so psyched about it. )

I'm sorry for my poor writing skill...I'm legastenic, so I see my own mistake only when I read my stuff a lot later.