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fiveskin · **First attempt -** 08-30-03

Completely alone yet conversing in lies
Cradling somber individualism
Amongst duplicates in disguise

Mind open yet so closed
A curious seed of thought takes flight
Blooming aspirations and inspiring in me
The will to be free

A provocative breeze; enthralls
Whispering a tune
Incomprehensible to me..

Aloft in its embrace
A tree spreads its wings
Coveted seclusions foretold...
Mesmerized by the rhythmatic flow;
Self-consciousness begins to wane

>FuckDoll< · 09-11-03

good deal fiveskin... i dig the flow, and the all around feel. Made me smile to see another poet with some interest thoughts conveyed through their words... I do hope to read more soon.

love this line:

"Completely alone yet conversing in lies"

. . . my only suggestion: utilize punctuation... could only add to the greatness.

>FuckDoll< · 09-15-03

gone away already??

fiveskin · **oops -** 09-20-03

Quote:

Originally Posted by >FuckDoll<

gone away already??

ah, sorry, i don't get a chance to get on here very often. very busy ;/
thanks for your interest though, i'll see if i could post another sometime soon. ;>

HeinousSoul · 09-20-03

Very nice...Like a breath of fresh air, seeing how things here are so stale...*laughs softly* It is good to read new poetry. Welcome.

~Angel~

>FuckDoll< · 09-21-03

yes, I too hope ya post more soon.

fiveskin · 12-14-04

This poem was recently published in Eternal Portraits due to come out in 2005.

!!!!!!!!!!

Ditto · 12-14-04

"A provocative breeze;"

Very nice.
Keep it up.

white lily · 12-15-04

hmm wel I was going to say welcome to df, but your have been around for awhile, just not on a lot...So instead I will say hi! I like the piece, it's good. Hopefully you will be able to write more and share it with us soon.

Firewall · 12-15-04

I got a poem published in "Eternal Portraits" as well dude....I dig the poem too, nice work....."Blood in trust" whoch is posted on my Anthology Of A Pariah thread is the one I had published.....nice job!

Keep it up!

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