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Unholy Union - 07-11-07

On hallowed grounds we consecrate
Burning glory, our sacrilegious love
How faint the heart beat, gently pounding
Mistaken for asleep
Murdered emotion
Unfeeling lips take hopeless hearts
To join the stars, we bind as one
Smothered roses long since black
They pierce our skin
Poisoned with the taint of death
But for forgiveness, a sweet sadness
A sickly taste upon my tongue
When whispers heard within the dark
Make me feel dirt under my nails
Another kiss from those unfeeling lips
To confirm this, unholy union
How faint my heart beats, i think it's stopped


_/\_"Blinded by the blood, i wander these days of haze that have become my life, searching for the clarity that i fear may only come to me in death"_/\_

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Once again you blow me away. Your grammar sucks, but the poem itself is great. I give it a 8.5/10 just because of the line 'Does us make it dirty'


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