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More Poetry (Am I coming though?) - 04-04-08

Every
thing
is held
within
your
eyes
upon looking
there is
no
looking away
staying with
me
as I wish your gaze
to.
Haunting
my dreams
Invading
my thoughts
(quite so wonderfully)

---

The wind carries The rain
and in it
I can feel you again
we will never end
You are here
in my heart (and there you will stay)
Protected so safe
there is no sun without your smile
and so it rains
and so it remains.
You are gone.
yet you are right here.

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Glamoured Glittery Girls
(tramps)
Stampeding through the shining streets
(Oh what a model walk)
High Heals and Prada Bags
(without such things they are but hags)
Superficial Glass Kisses
(only to bring you to your knees)
Boys Beware these Beauties
(they will consume you)

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Empty rooms line the cells of your heart
for fear of letting them in
and having them tear it apart
Capture that alluring gaze
yet fear that hunger
it will consume you whole
Then you'll be emptier than your heart
a shell waiting in line for its perfect demise
oh... those poisonous stares.

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Is it in you now?



I hope this is as good as what I first posted. These short poems, were written quite fast. So I don't expect them to match.
Nonetheless, I hope for you to enjoy.


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04-04-08

Great poetry, just one tiny suggestion. create one single collection thread and put all your poetry in there so other members can read all your work in one place and not have to switch between several threads in order to read your work. thank you.

If you want to do this and have me delete your other threads, let me know. the PM button is just .... PM Tozzy <- there



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04-04-08

Zilah ...

Again, I am compelled to read these pieces with wonder (particularly "Empty rooms line the cells of your heart ...") ... I call myself a poet (maybe others do not), but from one poet to another, protect your pieces as children not ready to take first steps ... Nurture them by researching then composing and researching again to determine if what you are saying has been said before and how ... Find your own voice, and find your place among a select group who've achieved the same ... It's extremely rare.

(Thanks to Tozzie (That's Tozzy pls) for his advice above, as well)

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Please spell my name properly. It's really not hard and it's written right there by my post, and in it.

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My sincere apologies, Tozzy ... Misspelling anything is a peeve of mine ... Thanks for correcting me ...
  
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