The.appreciated

Clutching.what.eyes.of.isis.bring.to.me
Im.exposed.again
Inhuman.heart.pressing.up.against.the.glass
The.blood.of.another
Ripping.these.leaden.bullets.through.my.heart
The.visions.of.the.martyr
So.soft.and.subtle.satan.says.these.words.soft-spoken
But.i.resist.unclenchingly
And.out.of.the.shadows.rises.the.beast.of.all.my.burden
Twitching.by.the.wave.of.the.midnight.wind
You.are.my.reminder.that.i.am.still.alive
And.this.hole.collapses.within.itself
Ripping.every.dream.i.have.apart
But.somehow...
Your.prescence.marks.another.way...
This.burning.glowing.epicenter.i.have.found...
Breaking.in.the.wake.of.my.unlimited.pain...
My.mortality.is.shed...
Like.a.fiber.of.a.past.life.wisked.away.in.the.wind
And.I.arise.from.my.grave.to.face.the.beast
But...
I.flee.in.pain.immediately
I.must.find.a.place.to.safely.shed.my.tears...

i like it... i wasnt in to the the use of "heart" in two consecutive lines, maybe a symbol of a heart would be more appealing... i like the alliteration in a couple of the lines... didnt you already have a thread? why the new one?

I like it other than I think you made up a word

very powerful...after I made it past those bloody periods...(no pun intended)

yes.but.what.would.fantasy.art.be.with.out.make.believe.words?

comprehensive

what word what word? i didn't catch it


i too enjoyed it...and yes, the alliteration was superb....i luv alliteration

unclenchingly? eh artistic lescence and such... try reading Caroll sometime

who should?

anyone who has a problem with made up words... he has his own fucking language... it's awesome, i luv louis caroll

didnt say I had a problem with it, just noticed it - and it didnt make sense to me. still doesnt. but then its 2am and not a lot is making sense.

and I love lewis caroll.

unclenchingly didnt make sense? the suffix denotes a "not" to the base "clench" with a progressive "ing" and made adverbial by "ly"

hmmm....i once used the word "epiphinomenal" in one of my poems, and my proff. was like "what kinda made up word is that"....but it isn't a made up word....itz a philosophical term.....


why did i tell you that?

cause yer crazy... remember my "undae-ing"... i have also created the word crookedities... i should posts that poem in my thread sometime

psht....i um.....hmm...i like to disect words

yes, they bring a lot of meaning without saying much

indead

yea, like I said. it was 2am...