Things might be painless to say

If maybe I lived somewhere far away

To damper my dreams

And slumber only in my psyche

It would be easier you see

If maybe the distance would keep growing between us

Your image may blend with my surroundings

I wouldn’t notice if you shifted into another character

If you were someone else

Would you cease those words that you spilled?

You will be aware of that familiarity once again

Of that old feeling you call regret

Accidentally pouring out your soul onto me

I am still drowning in it

The lies are up to my neck

Slowly breaking my heart

Shattering into pieces too small to mend

Repeating scenes from the beginning

Sometimes I believe these feelings will never end

Please, when will it end…

A+ for spelling. That's nice, and a good start. I'm not a big fan of the romantic side of poetry, so I won't bother to give you my opinion of the content. I'd just say slip in some punctuation and smooth out a couple rough spots and it could carry an audience. (AnD iT'S sO mUcH bEtTeR tHaN tHiS.)

Right on...i can respect that...

hmmm....you kinda had this rhyme scheme at the beginning, but for thank fuckin' god you didn't carry it out (hi, i'm the one who reams people's asses for rhyming)......oh, um.....I wouldn’t notice if you shifted into another character.....FUCKIN' BEAUTIFUL MAN!!!!!! seriously, great line (i'ma steal it!)......and um, some gothic overtones through out the piece, not overly done, but also didn't seem to fit, nonetheless, it was purdy good........

for your effort, you get a sticker!!!!!! (scratch n' sniff......CHERRY!)

hmm wow for once colored font that didn't give me eye strain, coutos to you. well I enjoyed. more please.....oh yes welcome to df.

Here is another... Titled "The Motions"

The motions of my hands are swift

Compelling and shifted with might

Soon there will come a boost

A shove that will control my thoughts

My views are too often shallow

Disguising those other sinners to be right

Haughty at times when I am alone

Revealing the truth is refreshing to my heart

Finding life hard and surprising

But yet both are a caution

A warning that is conceived through observation

Concentrating on the little fragile engagements

Fantasize that I am the only anyone

Real and genuine as a pink diamond

Sapphires and rubies

If I would contest to your words

Then will you break down

With the weakness that is concealed under thick skin

Be alone with me

Question me and I will fabricate a smile for you

Boastfully lingering through a night with a transparent moon

Respond to me when I call out to you

Abide the conflicts between you and me

A powerful soul will not let anyone feel heartrending

hmmm.....nice

very good. I like it a lot.

Titled "Weep"

For the passion that once existed in the night
The following cloud that rose in the light

The sun was no longer warming to my touch

Seeing the sky was no tenderer as once was

The heated fire grew in to harsh cold

As my face faded the fakeness showed

I weep as if I were criticized

I strive to keep some faith alive

For the fondness I have grown toward the dark

The constant echoes of screams embark

Find a soothing soul to replace the old one

Happiness could lurk in my haunting womb

Dream not in sleep but in conscious

Fight nightmares forever like a dream catcher

I worry as I drift away into endless oblivion

That I will accumulate silent whispers of which I’ve become

Lost now but found once in the past

Gather thoughts of hesitation real steadfast

Remembrance of the quiet of my past life

Upset by hidden secrets tossed out like waste

Swallow my pride and promise and haste

Before the burrowing of my soul

The ending of my life

A cure is never inevitable

For it was never real

does anyone find my font hard to read?, cause i will change it...let me know

hmmm, again, very nice....some good imagery....and me, being one who hates rhyme schemes, which you don't really do, i like your lines that rhyme.......

and um, we don't usually like font color, since most people use that blood-red.....but yourz isn't that bad.....most font color is a strain on the eyes, but yourz is fine

umm depending on how tired I am the bright pink/purple that you used near the beginning and end of the poem can be hard to read. otherwise it is ok.

as for the poem...*claps* bravo oncore oncore