Here's something deep i wrote, tell me what you think about it

Today I’ve shaved my thoughts, I’ve crossed my heart

The ghost star came along without any illusion of life

He put me in with his secret



Today I’ve shaved my thoughts, I’ve crossed my heart

The ghost star came along without any emergency and light

He drowned me in with his secret



And still, he has taken it from the emptiest part of me



I gave it into my eighteen seconds before sunrise

Where I pushed myself into to the state of self-destruction

I gave it into my eighteen seconds before sunrise

Where everything turned into to the state of my destruction



Today I’ve shaved my thoughts, I’ve crossed my heart

The ghost star has never came without any confusion and lies

I’m drowned and broken with his secret



And yet, I haven’t given in to the emptiest part of me



I gave it into my eighteen seconds before sunrise

Where I pushed myself into to the state of self-destruction

I gave it into my eighteen seconds before sunrise

Where everything turned into to the state of my destruction



I’m pushing myself into to self-destruction

Pushing us into the state of self-destruction


I wrote music to fit with it, Juste hope to have a band to play it.

i was wonderin' if this was a lyrical piece....and yup...

um....well, lyrical poetry isn't really my cup o' tea, but you proclaim it was "deep" and as i read it, i was hopin' for sumtin' profound and meaningful and, well, itz just not there.....for me at least, but like i said lyrical poetry isn't really sumtin' i'm into.....and as a fellow musician, i'm more musically inclined than lyrically......but um, rock on

it vaguely resembles NIN lyrics...the broken thoughts and loosely fitting together.....

interesting, it was a bit hard to follow and did seem broken up in spots. but yeah well show us something else now. hmm and just incase this is the firat thread you have started in the poetry forum.....welcome to df.

seeing as how itz their only post, i would imagine so white lily.....

lol yeah yeah so I was tired that day.grrrrrr keeping me on my toes here.