Hmm. A satire, or commentary? Well either way, it fused together quite well. Angst, rebellion, and romance all in one!? Yes, those are my favorites. Perhaps, I am missing the message.

This is your resume for a poet: nonconformity meets hopeless romanticism. You are hired my friend. Share more please. Thank you for writing this and allowing everyone to read.

I give it a ten, I loved it and plan to read it again before the night is over.

It's more of a commentary. It was inspired by a midnight bus stop in New York City. I began by writing about all the bums that kept bugging me for change, and the group of police officers just standing around talking... And then it sort of evolved into a commentary on power and how we've become somewhat disconnected... I don't know... hope that sheds a little light.

i liked it.

it starts out seeming to be something it is now, the ideas and lines are well connected and bring about a sense of....conclusion... of being fulsilled...

its also seemed to me to be allegorical...

That made absolutely no sense.