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04-23-07
Your first two stanzas have great imagery. I can hear and see and feel and really just know what you're trying to make us see. The rest of it gets a bit weak, it gets very telling and lacks that poinent imagery. I'm not sure the picture is needed, but i guess people like pictures? And the explanation is generally not accompanied with the poem posted.
You've got some great skill as evident in the beginning though, look forwards to seeing more a creative scientist, isn't that like a friendly koala? |