the potential for great imagery, but there's a sense of rambling and plodding along that left me sort of confused as to what point you were getting at, if there was one.,,are they snippets from a short story, the start of several different stories?

perhaps focus on one idea and work on it until it reads more smoothly, and then elaborate on the idea...put all that imagery into a work of consistant thought, adding a theme would make it, less confusing.