Quote:
|
Originally Posted by lilywhitemm
Tangerine flames in cerulean seas.
I close my eyes and fall asleep in the shade,
whispers of crickets on the evening breeze.
What happened to my bright sunny day?
Dwelling on summers past,
sprinklers, no school, late nights.
I felt like those days would always last.
I must soak up the last dwindling daylight.
Close your eyes and open the other senses.
What do you hear?
The joyous cries of children freed from the toil of school reaches my ears.
What do you smell?
The tangy scent of barbequed chicken, corn, hamburgers fills the air. The air is alive with spices.
What do you taste?
The sweet arctic cold tea washes over my tongue and I bite on the ice with a satisfying crunch.
What do you feel?
The warm breeze ruffles the leaves and glides across my skin, playfully tossing my hair across my face.
Can there be a more glorious moment than this?
The abusive chill winter air I can no longer recall,
Sweet days made up for the cold, leaving the skin sunkissed,
The perfumed night air and approaching fall. |
hmm... (thinking about the poem, not trying to influence or anything)... you know, i think it was fine until that third stanza... then you kind of turned into a grocery store commercial... heh.
___Nick_the_Rogue___
To view links or images in signatures your post count must be 10 or greater. You currently have 0 posts.
"But this is America, where we unapologetically bastardize other countries' cultures in a gross quest for moral and military supremacy." L.G.