i think i'm going to have to side with cowboy on this....itz not a bad poem, but itz definately not a great poem.....i like the words and the flow, but there's just something that doesn't seem right....either somethings missing, or like cowboy said "itz to easy for you," and yeah, it doesn't really seem like some of the other work of yours i have read....granted, most of your work i have read was lyrical-poetry.....but this piece.....hmm....i don't really know what to say about it.....i guess, i'm perplexed.....like cowboy said, itz not bad by any means, but it just seems off in some way