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12-20-04
Good story, love.
The flow is very well done. The descriptions are wonderful, and make me get a sense of who and how the characters are. The first line is good, brings your attention full force right at the start. And your last line follows that aswell, its a good closing line making me want to read more, but explaning enough to keep us satisfied.
I applaud. Take my love, Take my land
Take me where I can not stand.
I dont care, I'm still free,
You cant take the sky from me. |