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03-03-04
i think, if there were some way you could establish what makes the dude's death so expected, you would make it somewhat more powerful.
or you could change the language of the last line, making the death less of a surprise to the reader. something like, "a merely unexpected end"
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Last edited by Guy_Person : 03-03-04 at 18:50.
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