Aboslutely brilliant Messiah. I haven't found a dud poem on this thread yet!
The line I quoted above, I was thinking that maybe "fine formation"? rather than perfect? I know it's instant poetry and everything, but it's the only thing I could see that might benefit the change.
The F of Fine and Formation would group the words together with alliteration, almost giving the two words a visual point, plus it would fit in with the movement of the line better than "perfect".
A really brilliant poem (Even if you ignored my six line rule, but rules are meant to be broken blah).